Very cute and very funny. "Baby heart", Hamlet's long soliloquy and ghost stories are very cute, and he goes "get thee to a nunnery!" Although I wish you could make this a little longer and a bit less derivative. Ophelia's little resolution at the end is very adorable, although a bit depressing when you realize that he didn't eat his words at all.
The bit in CAPSLOCK near the end was so funny! I could imagine you at your computer, suddenly channeling your anger at non-understanding students and frantically typing that sentence. But by the way, there shouldn't have been a colon between "that" and ""IS" IS ONLY...". Either remove the colon or say something like "get through to their brains just one simple thing: "IS" IS ONLY..." Sorry to be so nitpicky, because overall I really, really enjoyed the piece. Cya!
A rather interesting story! It is brief, but Miss Nameless Therapist (I /do/ wish you'd given her a name) has a particularly amusing *voice*. The flaming world analogy was especially amusing. The story does feel a bit incomplete, and could use a bit of work, and the ending feels rather rushed. However, I still liked it a LOT, and will *totally* highlight it. Totally going to read more of your work!
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