Hello and good day to you. Wishing you a nice day. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. Dreams are wonderful but how magnificent to wake up with proof unless your still dreaming. haha .. Wonderful fantasy poem. I love them and well written. My favorite line in your poem is:
Within the mountain's heart of stone
free from earthly care
sat ancient Zeus upon his throne
as lightening split the air.
Hello and good day to you, wishing you a nice day today. I enjoyed reading your poem. It reminded me of writer's block but said in a much better way, in poetry. Lost Words, Nice, well-written poem just a tad of grammar errors. My favorite line is, The writer one day will fully recover the day she finds her lost words.
Hello and Gooday to you. Loved your story it made me chuckle and reminds me even in the dog world rules are to be broken. haha, Short story but well written and entertaining. I couldn't find anything I would change. You told your story well. Loved the ending. Have a great day! Star*
Hello Lou, I hope your day has been a good day. I enjoyed reading yet another one of your poems. I found this "perfect" No flaws at all. and flowed so well. Ah those memories, some so sweet and some not so, but "That's Life," as the song goes. You mentioned Freddy Fender, he is actually from a small town I grew up in and is buried there today. The small town of San Benito, Texas. Hometown of Freddy Fender on the water tower. haha... A good reading I had of this fine material, I loved it!
This poem reminds me of a scripture in the Bible, It's your kindness oh Lord that leads me to repentance. Your poem made me think of that. Loneliness and despair at being homeless. I've never experienced that but losing both my parents gave me a small feeling of that. I don't know why but when you lose both you feel like an orphan even though you're grown. I could feel the darkness in your poem and how it must feel, like death at times but death isn't there. Emptiness at having nothing. I'm glad you have a home now and thank you for sharing this poem. Star* Well written and I could envision the pain of that.
Hello and I loved your story, you certainly had a book going on here for sure, very interesting. Your characters were interesting, I know you spent a lot more time on this the usual but only thing I might add is more description about who the main characters of this story were. The important thing I think into getting into a good story is really making the main characters stand out. I could definitely see this story in book form, Good luck to you. Star*
Hello and Good Morning to you. I liked and enjoyed reading your story. I was interested in reading more, left me wondering how things evolved. Maybe a story that had to be written in a few words, cause I was seeking more. That said, I don't have that information, wish they would let us know. Have a nice day.
Beautiful poem you have written and I so enjoyed reading it. Grammer errors which I'm not sure that was important to you anyway, so not taking off for that, it's minor. Well Written and I loved it. Have a nice day. Star*
Hello and good day to you. I laughed at your story, was cute and funny. Good story, I enjoyed reading it. Only thing I would change is some grammar, maybe quotations when there is a speaking part and that's all she wrote.
Hello, Nice poem, I loved it, well written, made sense and flowed, most of the rhyming is good. The only thing I would change is: Making the land they did not deforests, take the s off and it would read much better. I also wouldn't use the word overdrive, just doesn't seem to fit there in this poem, might use something like, Her anger that is now alive, or her anger that is coming alive, she is now a force that has become alive. Anyway, I tried, maybe you can come up with something better. Another word for pissed, you might use, would make the poem sound better. Use of those words just seemed to stop the flow of your wonderful poem. You have some really good other verses in your poem. I enjoyed reading it. Star*
Hello, a nice short story with a powerful meaning, if you have bullied someone you can stop being a coward and shift into a brave soul by seeking forgiveness and confronting the person bullied. That's a powerful action, and wish more people would answer the call. People think you have to go to war to have or display bravery. Bravery is what this person did in this story, having to own up because her daughter was now the victim. Good Story, the only thing I might have changed is that Melanie describes how the bullying made her feel. The conversation between the two women a little more emotional. That's it... Enjoyed reading it! Have a nice one. Star*
Once upon a time, there was an_insect named Willie, (he thought he must be a worm but wasn't sure.) All he knew he crawled along the ground like a snake but was so much smaller. Being so small gave him a complex and he just knew no one liked him because he was such a lowly worm. Everyone else was taller than he was and always looked down on him and he was always having to look up, this made him feel very low._He wanted so much to be as tall as a limb on a tree or even as big as a moose with antlers. What a dream that would be, everyone would move out of the way when Willie the moose came around. "Yeah, that's what he wanted, all the animal world and insects to treat him with respect for after all even though he was very small he had a very big intelligence and that's what kept him going. His friends all told him to have big expectations, so that's what he began to believe, someday he just knew he would grow bigger. ___________________. Everyday,_he would go out walking and spend a lot of time just looking up at all the beauty around him and that always made him feel so much better.____________________________. One day,_Wille started to feel very strange not like himself at all. Like something really big was going to happen.________________________. Because of that,_he had an inner feeling to build a special kind of house and soon he went inside that house and went into a deep sleep.___________________________. Until finally,__he woke up and his house was no longer there and he fell to the ground. Willie then noticed that he no longer looked the same as before, something magnificent had happened to him. "Oh My," said Willie, "I have grown beautiful wings," He was bewildered! He began to use his wings to fly, high above every limb on a tree, and also above all the animals on the ground. He couldn't believe his luck. "Yes," said Willie, "that's all you need, high expectations, why just look at me." All his friends were looking at him and admiring him and waving at him from below. "I've turned into a beautiful butterfly and I can see the world now from on high." Morale of this story, yes most often there are moral's of stories as this one. So if your not happy who you are change and become something even better.__________________________.
I have some of Dr. Seuss books and I enjoy still reading them, they are so much fun to read aloud, and I love to read aloud. I can tell by your writing you are a skilled writer. Personally, I never at all questioned any of his books, knowing they were fictional. Oh, but I loved them and still do. Good Information, I enjoyed reading. Have a nice day. Star*
I think some guidelines for each field and some fields could have the same guidelines for reviewing or a person could just set up their own for example, for poetry; 1 star for good grammar, 2 stars for flowing, 3 stars for adequate rhyming and is it flowing well, 4 stars for did it make sense, 5 stars for couldn't find anything wrong at all. Specific Guidelines as to what is expected in that particular reading. I think are helpful and keep you on track with what your reading as a whole.
I loved your opinion on Women being, of course, a woman myself I can identify with what you have written here. Enjoyed reading your poem. The only thing I personally would change is the thought, If I were a man I would be intimidated by a strong woman also. I would hope If I were a man I would be the kind that wouldn't be intimidated by a strong woman and I know they are out there, maybe few and far between but there are many good men out there who respect women and I would hope I would be that kind if I were a man. Good writing loved viewing your poetry, appreciate your stand for women, thank-you and the great thought about what women bring to the plate.
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