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Review of Brotherhood  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am glad that I have found this story. I think that I really would love my dragon loving family to see this.

This is my favorite part.

However, the dragon did not attack him. It backed itself up to the cave it had created in the stone, and it lifted its tail to squat at the entrance. It shuddered, and powdery snow fell of its body as it shook. The dragon continued to stare at the magician with unnerving intelligence, and Venn could not move. After several moments, the strange intense scene ended, and the dragon dropped to the ground. The sudden rush of air forced snow and ice outward from the torso, and the magician was knocked to the ground.

Most movies that I watch with family that have dragons have them attacking first. I love how this is different.


I found this item in a news letter in my emails.

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Ida


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Review of Tea and Blossoms  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is a well written scene. My son's would love this item. They love the samuari stories. I thinkt hat this had a great flow and imagary. The conversation was conveyed well in the dailog. I think this could be a scene from a movie.

I found this story in my mail box.

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Ida


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful story about family relationships. I could feel the emotion throughout the entire story. I never knew my grandfahter, but I do miss and dream of my grand mothers. I realy could relate and put myself in the place of the ccharacter.

This is a story well told.

I found this in a newsletter

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Ida


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Review of Rendering  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
First of all, I want to thank you for the the spacing and the large and dark so that it would be a comfrontable read for those of us who has tired eyes.

I love the descriptions. That is a skill that seems easy for you. The first paragraph set the tone for the entire item, and it was an excellant start. Before the story unfolded, we were at seat's edge to see what this house had to tell us.

I found this story in a new letter.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like the spacing, but the font needs to be a little larger for the comfront of these tired eyes. You introduced you characters well, and the description choices in this item was excellent. There is different kinds of luck in this word, and whether we see it or not, we all are lucky.

I found this in the newsletter

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Ida


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Review of Surprise!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First I would like to welcome you to the writing.com family. I hope that you find this a great home like I have. There is so much support and encouragment here.

The story is smooth. The description and the flow keeps my attention.

I found this in my mail box in a newsletter.

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Ida


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Well I have learned something new. I would have never know what that game was. I have seen that ball before, but had never heard of the game or even seen it on sports.

The story was great, and it caused me to learn something new. The dialog is fluent and adds to the story.

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Ida


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great story. This has a grand flow. I really had fun reading this story. YOu really do a have great skill with dialog. The story is interesting and the descriptions are vivid. I also find that the solution to solve the problem to be one part that brings me into the story.

I found this story in my mail box. It was featured in a newsletter.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this poem. The flow was interresting and kept me reading. I really enjoyed the emotions behind the words.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida

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Rated: E | Bulletin | Writing.Com | #1931308
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Intro Rated: ESize: 0.54 KB Created: April 30th, 2013 at 9:41pmModified: April 30th, 2013 at 9:45pmPaging: Next ItemLocation: My PortfolioGenres: Writing.Com, ReviewingAccess: Registered Users and higher only.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love this story.

I wanted you to notice this item that was listed on the newbie.

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Rated: E | Bulletin | Writing.Com | #1931308
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Intro Rated: ESize: 0.54 KB Created: April 30th, 2013 at 9:41pmModified: April 30th, 2013 at 9:45pmPaging: Next ItemLocation: My PortfolioGenres: Writing.Com, ReviewingAccess: Registered Users and higher only.
As an author, reviews are valuable tools that help me to improve my work. So when someone takes the time to read and comment on one of my piece, I find it fitting to reciprocate- It doesn't matter if they randomly found the item or are a judge for a contest. This list will help me to keep track of who has and has not been reviewed.

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#3- drifter

#4- Angels in my ear
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I thought that this waws so sweet that I had to let you know.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I have listed how I found your item, and how I felt about finding it.

I love both versions of th image that you were looking at. They both contained deep emotions that I love to see in poetry.

Thank you for sharing this with you.
Ida

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Rated: E | Bulletin | Writing.Com | #1931308
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Intro Rated: ESize: 0.54 KB Created: April 30th, 2013 at 9:41pmModified: April 30th, 2013 at 9:45pmPaging: Next ItemLocation: My PortfolioGenres: Writing.Com, ReviewingAccess: Registered Users and higher only.
As an author, reviews are valuable tools that help me to improve my work. So when someone takes the time to read and comment on one of my piece, I find it fitting to reciprocate- It doesn't matter if they randomly found the item or are a judge for a contest. This list will help me to keep track of who has and has not been reviewed.

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#4- Angels in my ear
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I thought that this waws so sweet that I had to let you know.

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Review of The Snow Fence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Rated: E | Bulletin | Writing.Com | #1931308
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As an author, reviews are valuable tools that help me to improve my work. So when someone takes the time to read and comment on one of my piece, I find it fitting to reciprocate- It doesn't matter if they randomly found the item or are a judge for a contest. This list will help me to keep track of who has and has not been reviewed.

#1- Prosperous Snow

#2- turtlemoon

#3- drifter

#4- Angels in my ear
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I thought that this waws so sweet that I had to let you know.

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Review of The Sword of Elam  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I had another good read in this chapter, but I really feel that this chapter show even more of your talent of description. Your story is becoming more like a movie the more that I read. The events were told in such a manner that I felt that I was there. The sounds of the trumpets sounded in my ears. I liked the social activity of this chapter.

Thank you for sharing another chapter with us.
Ida


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

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Transitional Phrases
Transitional Words Score*: 30
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 121
Vocabulary Word Count: 9
Percentage of Vocab Words: 3.38%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): precarious, cynical, figment, perpetuated, ultimatum, resurrected, inclined, sovereign, crescendo

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!



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Review of The Window  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this poem. THe fluent nature of the poem is sweet.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Spiritual Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" Open in new Window.

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Review of The Enigma  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello Chuck,

I love this story, and thank you for your service to the country.

I love the flow and description.

Transitional Words Score*: 69
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 89
Vocabulary Word Count: 32
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.68%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): energizes, academic, battalion, philology, historical, linguistics, converted, arrogance, counterparts, rue

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 91* -> A
*based on college grading scale

NOTE: The grade above is NOT complete! We do not actually use a crystal ball to generate your grade. Instead, this grade takes into account spelling, grammar, word choice, style, vocabulary, and more; but it does NOT examine the meaning of your words, how your ideas are structured, or how well your arguments are supported. We should also mention that our automated grader doesn't always get things right (then again, neither does your teacher). So, please consider this grade to be one facet of your paper's overall grade.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I loved the story. THe dialog is smooth, and I was brought into your item by your good descriptions.


Stephen followed her through the side streets of Paris as they hurried down a back alley between an already-closed hat shop and a brasserie

should be

Stephen followed her through the side streets of Paris as they hurried down a back alley between an already-closed hat shop and a brassiere

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 3.235 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.

Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 98
Vocabulary Word Count: 35
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.87%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): concert, confidence, stumble, entrance, unique, clandestine, illuminate, meters, traversed, glow

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 92* -> A
*based on high school grading scale

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Review of Desolate  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very well written story. I enjoyed the read and found no mistakes. I have found a new site that proof reads Items, and I really use it to try to give a more indepth review.

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 2.195 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.

Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Review of The Sword of Elam  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have found a site that I have decided to put this chapter in to get your money's worth for your review.

First I want to tell you that I think that this is another well written chapter, and flows with the rest of the story that I have read so far.

Here is the proof read results.

Grammar Suggestions
No grammar errors detected

Bad Phrase Score
Bad Phrase Score*: 1.842 (lower is better)
*based on the number and quality of trite or inappropriate words, phrases, and cliches found in your paper.

Great job - your score is above average! You know exactly which phrases to avoid in your writing.


Sentence Length
sentence info:
10469 characters
2227 words, average length 4.70 characters = 1.36 syllables
175 sentences, average length 12.7 words
38% (67) short sentences (at most 8 words)
9% (16) long sentences (at least 23 words)
52 paragraphs, average length 3.4 sentences
2% (5) questions
27% (48) passive sentences
longest sent 40 wds at sent 124; shortest sent 1 wds at sent 55

Transitional Phrases
Transitional Words Score*: 39
*based on quality of transitional phrases used within your paper
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range! Nevertheless, you may still benefit from reading the info below.
One sign of an excellent writer is the use of transitional phrases. Transitional words and phrases (e.g. therefore, consequently, furthermore) contribute to the cohesiveness of a text and allow the sentences to flow smoothly. Without transitional phrases, a text will often seem disorganized and will most likely be difficult to understand. When these special words are used, they provide organization within a text and lead to greater understanding and enjoyment on the part of the reader.


These words and phrases fall under a few grammatical categories:

• Conjunctions: but, provided, and, although

• Prepositional phrases: in addition to, in conclusion

• Adverbs: also, however, nevertheless



Transitional phrases may be used in various places in a text:

• between paragraphs

• between sentences

• between sentence parts

• within sentence parts



For example, you could write:

Form and function are central themes in Biology. However, knowing the structure of something does not necessarily reveal its function.

The word 'however' contributes to greater unity or cohesion between sentences.

Vocabulary Score
Vocabulary Score: 88
Vocabulary Word Count: 41
Percentage of Vocab Words: 2.31%
Vocabulary Words in this Paper (a Subset): entranced, reverie, champion, entrance, visage, growled, bode, animated, forward, poised

Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

Grade: 94* -> A
*based on high school grading scale

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Sorry for the length, but it looks like the proof reader agrees with me. It is well written.

Thank you again for sharing this with us.

Ida


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Rated: E | (5.0)
The title caught my attention. I had to find out who this statement was being addressed to.

I love the story. The spacing is good on the eyes. THis is as great message. I could feel the emotions in this story. I really think that I really found this one story that I could relate to. The testemoney with in your words are touching.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Excellent work! Your usage of sophisticated words is on par with other well-written papers!

I like this story. The dialog is smooth. This is a skill that is not one of my best so I notice those who write conversations well. This one is easy to follow. The spacing between the paragraphs allows my eyes to read without the uncomfrontable squinting.


I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The dialog is great, and I am surprised with how well this is written. The descriptions are vivid.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Romance/Love Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" Open in new Window.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
Ida

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Review of The Debt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good job! Your usage of transitional phrases is within an acceptable range!

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.

"Romance/Love Newsletter (April 24, 2013)" Open in new Window.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
Ida

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for becoming a member of our writing.com family. I hope that you find this to be as much of a help and a home that I have since 2007.

I loved this story. I found it twisted my thoughts of relationships in the dark side of life. The spacing between sentences created a comfrontable read for my tired eyes.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
First welcome to the writing.com family. I have found so much support in my writing and in my life's struggles. I hope that you enjoy and find this a home.

THis is a great story behind the words. I truly enjoyed the smile behind this. I love that you have used space between paragraphs is something that I do not see often in a lot of newbies. This makes it so much easier for my eyes.

I found your item in a news letter that has been sent to me in my email. It was an editor's pick.


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