Hi Mordie,
Description of a snowy evening is evocative and appealing.
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The snowfall outside and the welcome warmth indoors keeping the bitter cold at bay are visual.
Use of adjectives like evening darkness, amorous displays, childhood slips and snow drifts draw my attention to the scenes you painted.
There is a natural flow and rhythm to the poem.
Imagery is sensory.
this is an appealing experience you had with your sister while dealing with a minor crisis. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a pleasant day.
It is true that many of us would feel as disgruntled as you did when Pan played you foul. You must have been pretty shocked at it. But that is way her nature goes.
Your timely and quite decent acceptance of what happened with a right action to follow, comes to me as a surprise.
You are right when you say that you have got it from the Voice explaining as it did what it means to turn the other cheek. It is not easy to follow. Learning to behave benevolently is truly appealing.
I am impressed and hope to follow the lesson you have learnt.
Hello Mitch,
this lesson from nature is shown well. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on this occasion. Have a wonderful day.
The rose is lovely but surrounded by thorns. I think we need to be careful touching any part with bare hands.
Despite good intentions, you got to leave them untouched I suppose.
But the lesson you got is for all.
"Some things are meant to be that way."
The way you connected woman to nature is appealing.
Free verse flows well. Its rhythm unmistakable.
Hi,
enjoyed reading this poem, which is all about making the best of life while it lasts.
It is quite exhorting about being a dreamer of good things like,
"The stars shine above
Home to ancestors
Long forgotten"
These lines remind me of my own ancestors without whom I wouldn't be born. So it is with love, the delicate string on which hangs the fate of two lives.
"Face your fears
Before it passes by"
The pleading of the lover has a special appeal.
"Give me passage
To your heart"
this is an appealing verse that shows the value of contentment.
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It is quite common to feel small and unnecessarily worried about our own self. Nothing is more depressing than feeling self pity. It happens to me too. Yet, as you did, I tell myself each of us is made unique. Each has his/her own place, view and understanding. That makes me a thinking and feeling individual. I am happy.
"Then people will tell me take a look at your world"
A wonderful take on how to find happiness.
It flows well with great imagery and a spontaneous feelings.
Hello Ken,
a funny but so true a poem on the coffee habit.
I am no drinker of the "dose of caffeine" and I have nothing against those who depend on it to start their day.
I am glad a cup of coffee has a benign effect on your mood and that it continues to support your "never-killed-anyone streak". Mind is a strange mechanism indeed.
I love the word play displayed in the title and the entire poem and the appeal of your sentiments expressed about coffee.
The use of hyperbole in the last stanza sounds credible albeit hilarious.
"...redemption's found in a coffee pot".
Then the world would lose balance because it tilts only to its good side with no sinners left.
Hello Bryce,
You have got a good conception of what our happiness is and where it comes from. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on this happy occasion. Have a wonderful day.
Your analysis of stages of life where you start having an idea of what makes you happy is clear and close to truth.
I can't even remember what I was during my infancy or early childhood. But I recall the way I was since age 6. Like any other child, I found the outside world a treasure house of never ending curiosities. People places and things got my attention and I was a keen observer.
In my case the sense of caring for others started right in the family. I had two younger sisters and two younger brothers, each with a difference of two years between them.
Truly caring for others started with my marriage.
Your reflections made me go back to my own past.
I enjoyed your article, written in fluent and easy flow of language and style.
Hello Robin,
this is an impressive poem on the significance of conscience, the possession of which makes us, human beings so special and singular.
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Indeed, conscience is our keeper. we are answerable to it. You have addressed it in several appropriate ways. As thinking and feeling beings we need to keep it clean so we can live free and happy lives. conscience checks us from falling to deplorable lows or unwanted highs in life. It helps us in keeping balance and in being level-headed under all circumstances.
I am able to see your through practical vision of conscience that inspired this excellent poem.
This flash shows that any object can make a tremendous theme for a story. I could see your creative juices are alive and that kept the reader deeply engaged.
Happy WDC Anniversary to you, Mark. Congratulations and have wonderful day!
It caught my attention with the opening line, which I heard is an important feature of a good writer.
"I began to tremble! ..."
You had me imagining the person with a gun pointed at him. It proved to be otherwise.
It is true that a fly needs a lot of preparation to be caught and killed.
The narrative showing the operation fly killing delivered with great appeal.
this is truly a helpful discussion on character building and first liners of a story. You made me aware that I should keep the reader in my mind along side of myself.
Boring starts if I drag on details, which at that point are not necessary. I should tuck them away for a more appropriate moment as the story progresses.
"But she kept on running, hoping she’d make it out the door before the Count, now dead for over 400 years, caught her and claimed her as his own."
The above sentence is detailed, yet, it unmistakably keeps the reader's curiosity whetted.
Love these clues to a good story.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a wonderful creative WDC Account Anniversary!
The purpose of the sunny summer holidays is well shown. A time to relax and rejuvenate the elemental juices in the body and mind.
"Anxiety, stress, washing away,
Each day passing on clear sunny days."
There is an obvious absence children which explains the pervasive silence. In silence the mind and spirit recover from the tensions of a working year.
The meticulous choice of words and line endings adheres to a pleasant rhyme and rhythm.
Hello Sarge,
I could see the underlying meaning of the message that Bob left for Jack. This is a message for all those speeding drivers everywhere.
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The story shows the vital role of a police officer in controlling those who drive recklessly bent on reaching home, which often results in uncalled for accidents.
Bob's own sad story of losing his only daughter is an effective example.
"Once upon a time I had a daughter. She was six when killed by a car."
It is a powerful narrative that cautions people to drive with care so that valuable lives may be saved.
Each part of the poem has fantastic word pictures. Feeling the heart and bones is not unrealistic at all. Changed metabolism over the years is a natural occurrence. Ability to voice it takes talent and imagination.
I especially like the appeal in the lines,
"My bones,
I feel,
are near dust."
A time comes when the body starts shutting down its mechanism. This poem has great relevance to human life.
The finishing line makes me think of the person that lost love to death.
Hello Frances,
There's something honest and straightforward about this piece of self revelation. The sketch you drew has the ingredients of what makes an interesting person. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congrats and have a lovely day.
I find it pretty novel to see a person who wants to be in the shadows rather than light. That contributes to being mysterious and the viewer becomes curious to know you.
What is interesting is that this "self sell" is not just about the physical appearance but it also highlights the mental side of the person.
"....great personality and a terrific sense of humor."
That should be a welcome feature for self and friends as well. What is life without humor?
Details show that you know yourself very well and that is something good to know.
Hello Sean,
night sky is an eternal conundrum. Often makes me think about what lay behind the darkness at night dotted by a billion twinkling stars and the sunlit broad light of the day. Both phases are alluring and attractive. Shade and light are the two faces of the same sky.
Your thoughts on this endless roof over the world are well composed and sound inquisitive.
" What drives your thoughts is what you want to know. The endless possibilities waiting, hiding, under the allure of those bright baubles"
I fully appreciate your wonder and your curiosity about the night sky as I too happen to be an avid star gazer and the expanding sky.
I and my life look so small before the elements of which the sky is a part. Yet, they are no threats. They help us to contemplate and wonder as to who made these beautiful eternal things of the universe.
I appreciate the prose style and imagery you have used in describing the night sky. Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!
aunt Catherine appears to be kindly and hearty person. She seems human to the core judging by the portrait you painted of her.
"She gave nothing but love,
this sister of my father"
Relatives with an instinct to help are rare to come by. You have had your her in an hour of need. Such people are a real blessing to thank for.
I find it quite amazing that even in eighties, she was making "magical blankets" for the "red-haired baby boys." Quite a patient person she appears. I love the combination of color and magic you used.
I have enjoyed this well composed free verse with an unmistakable rhythm.
It looks like a haunted mansion with people who lived there a long time ago. You wove an interesting story with those prompt words (?) using the senses of seeing, hearing, and taste and the feel of fire(touch).
A clear picture of the ghostly story emerges out of those very curious sounding words. Rapacious for one, made me think of the elderly person you met and her intentions in forcing attention on you. But the cookies are inviting enough and so it didn't take long for you to break the scruples and enter a strange white mansion with no idea as to who lived there.
I find it a scary and horrible to have a fire all around you and instead of swooning away you think of the firemen. That's positive thinking in the middle of being caught in a catastrophe.
I have enjoyed this writing exercise with endless possibilities.
Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary, DragonWrites!
Quite an inspiring life you have had. My review of this article is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another year at the WDC. Have a great day.
It is a great metaphor of life. A busy and an active person has hardly time to complain or regret. On the contrary, he finds new challenges and new ways to learn more about the job, people and the world. There is nothing like experience which is of great value. And you seem to have it in plenty.
I appreciate your attitude to learn even at forty. Learning has no age limit. That is the beauty and novelty of learning new things. I have been learning Spanish for the last few months and I am thrilled by what I come across.
Your openness to challenges took you to heights you have never imagined. You have had the pleasure of enjoying the rewards your hard work reaped. You were indeed a "moving object".
This is an ideal life and anyone who takes a leaf out of it is definitely going to benefit.
Quite an inspiring life you have had. My review of this article is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another year at the WDC. Have a great day.
It is a great metaphor of life. A busy and an active person has hardly time to complain or regret. On the contrary, he finds new challenges and new ways to learn more about the job, people and the world. There is nothing like experience which is of great value. And you seem to have it in plenty.
I appreciate your attitude to learn even at forty. Learning has no age limit. That is the beauty and novelty of learning new things. I have been learning Spanish for the last few months and I am thrilled by what I come across.
Your openness to challenges took you to heights you have never imagined. You have had the pleasure of enjoying the rewards your hard work reaped. You were indeed a "moving object".
This is an ideal life and anyone who takes a leaf out of it is definitely going to benefit.
I am truly impressed by this essay on writing. Writing takes time, patience and the nerve and passion to keep the fire burning.
You said something very interesting. "I did not choose writing, writing had chosen me." That means the urge to write stayed steady on your mind. Right?
Writing is an art. It takes talent and skill to become successful writer. Writing is therapeutic and a powerful medium of communication. Writing is an outlet for emotions and feelings and thoughts.
It is a proven historical fact that the pen is mightier than a sword. Almost all the rebellions and reformations are based on powerful writings.
"If you really want to be a writer you must invest in reading and writing." The more we read, the better we write. I think this is an experience with all genuine writers.
"The idea or ideas are essentials in writing." I like and agree with the opinion that it is not grammar, but the core idea that matters more. This is the reason why there many non-English speaking authors who are incredibly successful.
Writers are often very sensitive. That is the reason why they understand the emotions and feelings of others and portray them in their writings. Of course it takes imagination and the ability to probe the human psyche like Dostoevsky. They are also thinkers and philosophers.
Indeed, I am an incurable lover of both reading and writing.
Thank you for your fresh analysis of the contours of the art of writing.
it is difficult to understand why death takes those, who are very young and in full health. Its suddenness is astounding no doubt. Only the creator can understand such untimely decisions. Untimely for us, the mortals. The body mechanism so complicated and we are not aware of all implications.
We feel the loss because they are close to us. Imagine thousands upon thousands, who die everyday due to various reasons and causes.
It is a subjective poem with a perfect rhyming and rhythm.
It flows well with many memories and the painful aftermath that follows unexpected departure of friends and associates.
I can see poetry means a lot of different things to Sue.
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Poetry is a useful expression of your feelings, both positive and otherwise. I am able to imagine the therapeutic value of doing so.
I note that writing poetry has set your goals and holds hope that you'd one day become well-known. No doubt about that.
"It lifts my spirits, sets me free."
This is well said. Nothing is more important than feeling elated and free.
It is a well narrated story of a lonely woman. Her bitterness and dislike of her husband's behaviour comes through quite clearly and visibly. The descriptive details win my praise. Attention to details like her meticulous arrangement of Valentine dinner comes through with appeal. Then her reflections of his changing ways, his gradual decrease of time spent with her and her anger a him and her planning of next step to cure her present dissatisfied life are dealt with, with an appeal.
It is the negative shade of love when she said,
"She'd just have to wait and kill him next time." The drastic twist at the end of the tale.
You do have a lot of Pride and Prejudice tucked into the story. Liz Bennett seems to be the one who is in the book store looking for a romance novel.
Clever work on your part adapting the various characters of Jane Austen's magnum opus into this flash story.
Ironic is the end, when she was given "Pride and Prejudice" in the store book store. Characters are set up against modern setting with cell phones and emails and SMS.
I enjoyed the read.
Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!
Hi,
I am here to review your poem. This is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congrats on having done with another year at the WDC. Have a nice day.
You have dealt with two different things here, namely,the little girl's grave and a century old oak tree. Deaths in different ways. The tree is killed by cutting it down like a patient dying on the operating table while we do not know the cause of the girl's demise.
Their juxtaposition gives rise to various thoughts. There appears to be no disturbance for the long sleep of the girl and the tree is yet to be completely dead.
" reduced to a stump in minutes."
It is a good exercise in showing how people rest and how the trees are made to rest.
A thoughtful poem with visual imagery and a good flow.
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