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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey Joy
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 20th WDC Anniversary!

         This is quite a story here Joy. I must admit that I felt early on that Iain was the vampire, but could not tell you why. Your story is deep and involved, with twists at every turn. There's a lot to this story though, and if you didn't pay attention, you would lose focus.

         This is not meant to be a criticism of the story because I really enjoyed it. But it seemed to ramble some, almost as if you lost your own focus while writing it. Your characters were well defined and described, Violet's Mum being psychic was a surprise to me. It was the end that got me. Your story had flowed very well with the twists and turns I mentioned earlier. Then, it seemed you just dropped things. Violet's Mum revealed her own secret and the story just seems to end. The end is more of a summary of things, instead of details. Maybe that's best, I don't know. I do know I enjoyed it, and intend to read more of your writing in the future!

         Thank you for sharing!



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Review of On Giving Reviews  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey Rosielle,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 16th WDC Anniversary!


         Wow, what a great article! I love reviewing, but anymore sending a lengthy, detailed review is a rarity. Being the owner of Anniversary Reviews, I've had the chance to read reviews from many of our members. As you know, some people know how to write a good review, and some just plain.... well, we won't say that word here....

         I am not a write who knows the technical side of writing at all. I tagged this in a notebook entry and mentioned that I know little of how to really write. At least that's how I word it. I can identify improper usage of the English language in many cases, but there's no way I can tell the author why it's incorrect. I'm fine with that. Yeah, English was my worst subject in school, I really struggled to get B's, if I didn't work at it much, I'd get C's.

         There are a couple of very minor things you may want to look at, should you decide to edit this.


1. Writers are often too close to their own words to know that works and what needs help. Is 'that' supposed to be what?

2. Characters are one of the very most important things about a story. It seems you don't need the word 'very' in this line.

3. The writer should (ideally) include a clear thesis statement that outlines her main idea and major points in the first paragraph. Are all writers female? *Laugh* You might want to change it to her/his.


         Overall, I think you provide excellent advice in this, and wish some of our reviewers would 'read and heed' your words. Myself included.



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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hey Jace!
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 13th WDC Anniversary! Actually, being the featured author for the month, there's no way I'd let the month pass without sending you at least one review.

         While I have each of these in the past, it's always fun to re-read them. As much as I'd love to say I have a favorite one, I can't, I love them all. As I've aged though, I've come to realize that while we Americans are a great people overall, so are the people who live in other countries. They were not lucky enough to be born in a country where so much can be earned if you try. I see what's going on in our beautiful land today, and it makes me cringe. I'm almost glad that I won't be around forever because I'd hate to see what becomes of the U.S.A. Personal opinion, and I know what it's worth.

         I love making others smile, this one cause that same reaction in me. Thank you for sharing!


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Review of Buzz, Buzz  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey Adrian,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 12th WDC Anniversary!

         You have a good start to a nice story here, but I have to say, it should be a little longer. Of course, that's just my opinion, I didn't write this. What I mean by my comment is, you've shown us the hook, and in some cases, set it. Then you dropped us like a hot potato.

         You spent some time developing Gracie's character. I bet more than half the story is setting up Gracie, Hannah, and Cassie's characters. There was a little bit devoted to their party at the bar, followed by a few lines about Adam texting her. Except it wasn't Adam. It was about this time that you introduced the antagonist, perhaps a killer. And suddenly, you dropped it all, and left it to our imagination. There's nothing wrong with that, but man, you could have built this so nicely! Bring in the antagonist, Gracie rushes home... Are Adam and Max dead? Is Adam playing a trick on her, maybe a prank? Is Adam really the man she thinks he is, or is there another side to him that she has no idea about? These are things that pop in my head, and I know you wanted the reader to use their imagination. Nothing wrong with that. But, editing this so it's longer, a few more answers, yet leaving the reader still hanging at the end would have made this such a great story! Again, just my opinion. Thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey Ben,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 13th WDC Anniversary!

         I have to confess that I was wondering where this was going. It seemed too short to have much of a plot or underlying story. Then, the second part of the story arrived, and things shifted. You left me wondering if the human's that were thrown on the beach lived or not. *Smile* Nice twist, I really enjoyed it!




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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
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Hey Daniella,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         First, let me say that your story is pretty good, and it probably more truthful that most. This probably happens more than I care to think about, I just hope this is a work of fiction.

         I always try to send Anniversary Reviews that uplift someone, but I must be honest, and can't for this one. There are several grammatical issues in this, as well as formatting issues. If I may, here are my comments, and advice on it, if you choose to edit this.

1. When a new character speaks, you should start a new paragraph. In using paragraphs, double space them. This is not a requirement, it makes it easier to read in a soft copy format like this.

2. I mentioned grammatical issues. There are many misspelled words, as well as incorrect word usage. This is what I saw, it is not a complete list.

         a.  That is all you really need to know for know, you will learn the rest as we go on. The second know should be now.

         b.  I just don’t understand what one earth I could have done. One should be on.

         c.  “Maybe if I stay quite he will just go away." Quite should be quiet.

         d.  “You thought I would you were off the hook, huh?” As written, this sentence does not make much sense. You have a couple of extra words here, I'm not sure which ones you want to keep.

3. I mentioned using paragraphs. Here's an example where you could use a new paragraph.

“Mom, can I go with Janie tonight to her house to hang out?” Sarah asked. Her mother didn’t answer right away; she just sat there washing dishes like a robot. Ever since family starting falling apart she had been this way. She was always depressed, once in awhile she would be in a really good mood and she take Sarah and Zach out of school for a day and go do all kinds of fun stuff with them. That was usually only when their dad was away though. “Yeah, I guess. What time will you be home?” “How about 10 since it isn’t a school night?” Sarah replied. Her mom didn’t answer so she took that as a yes and left.


         I have no desire to point out every small thing I see, but I hope this gives you a good idea what your story needs edit-wise. Again, it's a good story, but it needs a bit of editing TLC. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Haunted  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey Lori,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 18th WDC Anniversary!

         I absolutely love this. I wouldn't change a word, nor fix any errors someone might point out. (I didn't see any myself). This just lays your love for your husband out there for all to see. That's how it should be. This was written 14 years ago, I hope by now your heart has healed and allowed you to live somewhat happily. I know you'll never forget him, nor should you. But I do hope you have been living your life.

         Being in my middle age (okay, senior years), I appreciate so much in life that I took for granted years ago. One of the many things I've come to realize is this. Life does go on. We have all lost loved ones, though I've not lost anyone like you have. All we can do is continue to live our lives. So that's my hope and prayer for you. Excellent essay here, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Arrival  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hey Chris,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         I love anything to do with Santa, and I couldn't tell you why. *Smile* This is a nice story, but it needs a little 'meat' added to it. I love the concept you propose here of a colony on Mars and Santa visiting in a cargo ship. I have to tell you though, there's an awful lot of telling in most of the story, and very little showing. Read your first four paragraphs again and see what you think. There's no dialog, other than the computer voice announcing the airlock is secured. Dialog can really help carry a story, and provide some depth, and well as providing showing. As I read those first paragraphs, even in my mind it seemed almost monotone. Think of the old commercial where a guy worked for a pizza joint. It was about him waking up each morning, and what he did at work. "Go to the freezer and get some cheese. Go to the pantry and get some flour for the crust..." The dialog in this commercial was very monotone in nature, exactly how I 'pictured' those fist paragraphs.

         The story really improved once the squad met the Gingerbread man. And guess what? That's where the dialog really started....

Suggestions:

1. Somehow, work some dialog into those first paragraphs. I know I sound like a broken record typing that again, but that will help.

2. Provide a little more background about the colony, and your main character. It really is pretty dry.

I did see a couple of things you should look at, if you decide to edit this.

1. I was assigned to a colony on Mars. Alpha One Port was a science colony on Mars. Using the word Mars in quick succession sort of sets the tone for the story. Maybe use the word 'there' in place of the second usage of Mars.

2. The atmosphere on Mars was also poisonous and the climate uninhabitable. This statement is redundant in that if you say the atmosphere is poisonous, then it's obviously uninhabitable.

3. I was assigned as part of a squad of grunts meant to police the scientists and solve any issues that might arise. The wording here seems strange, a little off. What I mean is, why do you have to 'police the scientists'? I would think you were assigned there to provide security. That's all you need to say, nothing more. I know, people will ask, why would you need security on Mars? Well, suppose there were Martians somewhere on the planet, or some other life form? Suppose a different corporation or renegade faction on Earth wanted to take over? That's why you're there it seems.

4. After all they survive the time they spend in San Francisco every year just fine. You're missing a Y at the end of they


         Don't take all my comments here wrong though. It's a good story, you have a nice start here. It's just awfully dry reading it. A little editing TLC will improve it a lot. Thank you for sharing!


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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Bikerider,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         I remember writing a poem to this prompt also, a quite different story. Your story is very good, but I confess that when Catherine told Abel what she would name their child, I knew Abel would not make it home from that voyage. The flow was very good, and the dialog in it really carried it well.

         I love the idea behind this story, I'm sure something factual happened almost just like this many times in the past. I have mentioned that I knew Abel wouldn't return from this voyage, it was due to the title mainly.

         I don't recall if there was a word limit to this contest or not, but once Abel left port, things happened pretty quickly. I know you said it was the fifth day since leaving, but it seems you could have added a couple of things during the previous four to help it flow a little better. Especially now that this contest is long over.

         I will say that it seems Abel was alerted to the storm itself rather late, And while I've never been on a sailing vessel before, it would seem that the one at the helm would have lowered the sails long before Abel was alerted to the storm. If he didn't have the authority to do that himself, then he should have alerted the Captain much sooner.

         I did see a few things you might want to look at, should you decide to edit this.


1. I"LL Name Him Abel I'm not sure why you used closing quotation marks here instead of an apostrophe. Also, the L's should be lower case, even if it does look goofy.

2. He stopped himself from thinking about how much he would miss her during his voyage, and how much he would miss about her. I think you typed this twice without really thinking about it.


3. “Mr. Brewster,” shouted Able, This is one of 2 places you misspelled Abel's name.


4. “It has only been five days since Able sailed.” This is the other.


         This is a good story that just needs a little minor editing TLC.



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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey Lezismore,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 6th WDC Anniversary!

         This is very cute, I really enjoyed it! I think an all dialog story can be pretty challenging, but you pulled it off well. Italicizing the shadows words was an excellent idea, it really helps a reader in knowing who's speaking. I found it interesting that the human was reluctant to contact Thelma. His shadow liked her shadow quite a lot, that tells me there was something there that he was probably not aware of. Unless of course your shadow can have different attributes than you. Hmmmmm, interesting thought. Well done with this though, thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Hatsuda,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         I've read several of your stories over the years, and have yet to be disappointed. You have a way of spinning a yarn, a way of telling a story, all the while showing us some really nice sights in our minds-eye. You remind me of my friend Amay in that regard. Your writing seems to have been written effortlessly, as if you're sitting around a campfire relating your story. That's not criticism, that's a compliment.

         I never knew any of my grandparents well, I last saw my mother's parents in 1960 or so, maybe even 1959. I never met my father's side of the family. I envy you your memories and photo's of them. As usual, very well written, thank you for sharing!


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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hey Jeff,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 18th WDC Anniversary!

         Okay Jeff, your little twist at the end caught me by surprise. I was sort of expecting something sinister from Lara, something that would really make your main character have second thoughts about her. I like your twist better than my fuzzy idea though.

         You did very well with the dialog in this, it carried the story along smoothly at a pace that wasn't hard to follow. Your main character sounds like a real Klutz. I know we can all be that way at times, but he takes the cake! (Just for the record, I've never been that smooth around women, then again, I'm definitely not as clumsy as he is either.)

         The last line is a bit sappy, but hey, you ended it well overall. A nice story that is also a good read. Thank you for sharing!



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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hey Elisa,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 19th WDC Anniversary!

         Wow! What a great story! I really enjoy love stories, and this one definitely didn't disappoint. It's far from perfect, but I'm not going to nit-pick it. But look through this, there are several places where you use 'you', instead of 'your'. Small things.

         What I found different in this, is their spouses knowing they had feelings for each other, and accepting it instead of being jealous. That doesn't happen often in this world, and maybe it needs to. I've long felt that you can love more than one person. But you need to be devoted to just one person. Does that make sense?

         The other thing (oh there was far more than one, but I will mention only one here), is why Christine didn't give Mitch any presents in return. I know this is all about him giving her gifts, but I would think she'd feel almost obligated to give at least one in return. Just wondering is all. Excellent story, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Stranded  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Leger,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         For some reason, the cannibal idea came to my mind the minute you mentioned the natives in this story. (I think it was the painted faces that told me about the natives). Very well written though, the flow was quick and purposeful making this a pleasurable read.

         I did feel the ending, as well as the whole story, was a bit quick. Then again, you were under a word count for the contest. Still, I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing!


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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Natasha,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         This is very good, a somewhat sad read, but very good nonetheless. We live in the moment, no one can tell what the future holds. What I've learned in life in my 66 years, is to love as much as you can. Accept it for what it is, cherish the moment, and try to keep it at all times. It takes work, it takes dedication, it takes commitment. Nothing in life is free, even love. Yes, you will have your doubts, you always will. But love them all you can, and see if somehow you can keep them with you. (Sorry, didn't meant to lecture here.)



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Review of Night and Day  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hey Mara,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         I will keep this short because it's a little difficult to concentrate right now, a little difficult to type. You know why.

         What can I say? I saw a review of this from Nixie and knew I had to read it. Man am I glad I did! It's not often I find something to read that I really hate finishing, because finishing it means I don't have it with me anymore. Few stories move me as much as this one did. And all I can do, is Thank You for sharing/writing it! I feel lucky to have read it. Thank you again. And Happy Anniversary!



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Review of Season Tickets  
Review by Sum1 In Halifax
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review by Sum1 In Halifax
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hey Stormy,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 20th WDC Anniversary! Wow! Congratulations!

         I looked at a couple of your stories this morning, you seem to dwell on ones that are a bit sad, a bit different. There's nothing wrong with that of course, but it doesn't seem to be the you that I've 'met' in your newsletters. Of course, this one here was written early on in your career here on WDC, so maybe times have changed, and along with that, your feelings and thoughts.

         I found this one to be a bit depressing, but well written. I can't imagine living a life like this, so I have a hard time relating to your character. However, I do feel for her, and hope things worked out in the end. You wrote this, only you know the final ending to this story.

         I hope you are doing well amid this global pandemic, and are as happy as can be. I will see if I can find other stories of your to read that are not as dark. A very good story, just a bit dark is all.... Thank you for sharing.



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Review of Ancient My Enemy  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Cynaemon,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         While my preference leans more towards rhyming poetry, I find myself always drawn to a well told story. When it's told in a poem, I love it even more, as I did this. The poem reminds me of an old book by Marion Zimmer Bradley, "Hunters Of The Red Moon". The two aren't near alike one bit, but still, I was reminded, and that's a good thing.

         My only suggestion for this, would be to center it on the page. There's just something about page centered poetry that really strikes me. Nothing wrong with it as it is, centering it is a personal preference, nothing more. Very nice poem, thank you for sharing!


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Hey Richard,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 1st WDC Anniversary!

         As a Submarine Veteran, I understand the importance of Memorial Day more than most. Your tribute is beautiful, I hope you have managed to live a full life despite your losses.

         You list your relatives and a family friend who have served, and no matter what, they served honorably. Yes, the military makes mistakes in who they send where, and I hate to say it, but it's a matter of need. Ray and George may have completed training at different times, and there was a need for each in those positions. Yes, it could have been much better. I don't understand this anymore than you, nor was I ever put in any danger the way these two were. I know little of how they send people to their duty stations, but I imagine there was some amount of logic to their madness. Beautifully done, thank you for sharing. (This does have a couple of minor typos I chose to ignore. I think if you read through it carefully, you'll see them).



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Review of Coffee Shop  
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Hey Turtle,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 10th WDC Anniversary!

         You have a great start to a nice story here. Why only a start? Simple. Because I want to know more! If you chose to expand on this, make it longer, I still wouldn't want to know what the answer is she's trying to find. But there's so much more you could relate here, describe to us, take us to.

         One of the things that strikes me, is where she went. There had to be things she experienced that's not mentioned here. Does she see the other world, this other universe only when she drinks coffee and such? Or can she get there in other ways? So many questions that only you can answer...

         As I have already said, very nice story, I love it! I just want to read more... Thank you for sharing!



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Hey L. V.
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 12th WDC Anniversary!

         I have to say, this is pretty cool. I too love coffee, and can really relate to this. Your rhyme scheme is spot on, it matches the scheme you describe below the poem. The rhythm is something else though.

         Here's the syllable count for each verse. You can see that the 10 syllable line stands out, and when you read it aloud, it REALLY stands out, throwing the reader off the pace of it. 7/7/7/8/10/8 8/7/8/8/8/10

         Suggestions? Edit the long lines, see if you can get them down to about 8 syllables. Sadly, I have no suggestions on possible edits. Very nice poem, thank you for sharing!



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Hey tHiNg,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 19th (WOW!) WDC Anniversary!

         I really enjoy reading most anything you write. This one is very cute, and it seems we have something in common. While I don't recall being sent to the 'Thinking Chair', I was (am) known for 'Putting-My-Foot-In-My-Mouth. If I'm not doing that, I seem to do something that makes people wonder where my mind is.

         I could see you sitting in that chair, except you weren't taking your 'punishment' easily. In my mind, I saw a frown, and your mind churning, small gears above your head as you planned your revenge. Whether or not you ever took your revenge is not mentioned here, but I could see the gears turning.

         The one difference between us though, is that my siblings never told stories quite like that about me. Well done here, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Death and Faxes  
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Carol,
         There is no way I can let this month pass without sending you an Anniversary Review! Happy 14th Anniversary my dear, I hope you are doing well overall.

         I loved the twist you put in this story! The dialog between Maggie and The Grim Reaper was perfect. I loved the back-n-forth between the two of them. It's like they are long lost friends who are seeing each other for the first time in years. You imply that's the case with the Grim Reaper's comment, "Margaret, we've had this discussion before." For me, this leads to a larger back story, and I ask myself, "Does Dexter know she's tried to commit suicide in the past?"

         Another question I find myself asking, is since the Grim Reaper knew about her being fired, and the status of her bank account, why didn't he know Dexter was coming over? He mentions that those are 'in the book', but the fact that Dexter dumped her was not. It seems 'the book' has her life already written, so why didn't he know Dexter was coming over? *Smile* My mind works in weird ways at times, don't worry about it.

         Overall, I found this story to be a bit amusing, a perfect read if you're looking to put a smile on your face. Thank you for sharing!


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Hey Duhh,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 2nd WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very good story that leaves you with a warm feeling. It flows fast, but that's fine. I had a feeling about where his music box really came from, but you hid it well if you ask me. The only comment I'd have, is that he would probably recognize an 11 y/o handwriting as not being his wife's. But it's fine really, maybe he was so excited by the music box that he never noticed. Nice story, thank you for sharing!


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