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Greetings, S M Ferguson ~
I really liked the content in this poem. It is a good read with nice flow and varied rhyming patterns.
I have these suggestions for you to consider:
Lightworker I take to be like an angel or angel's helper. When not starting the sentence, it shouldn't be capitalized since it is a generic name.
Lightworker, [L](l)ightworker(,) there's so much to do[,](.)
...on you(.)[,]
We(,) the archangels(,) do ...
Awaken(,) [L](l)ightworkers[,](;) the world needs you all.
[Your](You're) tired and weary[, your](; you're) not at your best[,](.)
... could rest[,](.)
... round the world[,](.)
My beloved [L](l)ightworker, we're ...
Lightworker, [L](l)ightworker, don't look so depressed[,](.)
...
... touch who(m) you can[,](.)
Lightworker,[L](l)ightworker, send ...
... spirit divine[,](.)
Arch[A](a)ngels assist you in this(,) your great quest[,](.)
Lightworker, [L](l)ightworker, ignore ... jest[,](.)
Let your light shine out(,) and we'll ...
Cheers!
Harry
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