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Rated: ASR · Fiction · Thriller/Suspense · #2039839
Short piece experimenting with POV. Any feedback appreciated!
I see him through the large swarm of people. He stands alone, completely still. His eyes, black, swallow me whole as he stares at me. I can’t move. My heart has frozen over and my blood has turned to ice. He begins to walk towards me. Each step he takes breaks me further. I try to scream out, but no sound leaves my mouth. The ice has spread to my throat. He stops in front of me, so close that I can feel his warm breath on my skin. He opens his mouth to speak.
And the words, like poison, drip from his lips.

I see her through the large swarm of people. She is completely still, her deep blue eyes wild with fear. I could not imagine anything more beautiful. I begin to walk towards her. I can see that she wants to run, to scream for help, but it’s like she doesn’t know how. A deer caught in the headlights. I stop in front of her. Her long, blonde hair catches in the artificial light and it takes everything in me to resist reaching out and touching it. I open my mouth to speak.
She drinks in my words, cringing as if they were poison.

I see them both through the large swarm of people. They stare at each other across the crowd, both completely still. Their eyes connect, his full of power and hers full of fear. She doesn’t move a muscle as he begins to walk towards her, people parting for him as he does. He stops in front of her, so close that their chests almost touch. He opens his mouth to speak, not breaking eye contact for even a second. Once he has spoken, he receives a small nod of her head in reply, and he laces his arm around her waist possessively. She says nothing as he walks her out of the building.
The last thing I see before the door closes behind them is the curl of his fingers, gripping her side like he’s never going to let go.
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