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That Comma
I love commas. Reviewers and editors feel I like commas too much. I'm quite happy sprinkling commas all over my writing like croutons on a salad. This makes people frown. I'm never sure why.
In an effort to de-comma my work and learn a little more about punctuation, I searched around the internet for some comma help. It's about as bad as looking up your aches and pains on the web, you start to feel like you have some incurable jungle disease rather than a simple itch. When I go to the doctor and point to the itchy spot while mumbling something about jungle diseases, he tells me to stop Googling. I open my mouth to argue and he says, "Who's the doctor here?" Oh, right. Oops.
While surfing for jungle diseases comma help, I stumbled onto the Oxford Dictionary ▼ website. While they had no explanations for words I like to use such as "floopy" or "schlump", they do have some grammar help. This includes help for stuff like commas in direct speech. I'll share it here:
"When a writer quotes a speaker’s words exactly as they were spoken, this is known as direct speech. If the piece of direct speech comes after the information about who is speaking, you need to use a comma to introduce the direct speech. The comma comes before the first quotation mark. Note that the final quotation mark follows the full stop at the end of the direct speech:
Steve replied, ‘No problem.’
You also need to use a comma at the end of a piece of direct speech, if the speech comes before the information about who is speaking. In this case, the comma goes inside the quotation mark:
‘I don’t agree,’ I replied.
‘Here we are,' they said.
There are two exceptions to this rule. If a piece of direct speech takes the form of a question or an exclamation, you should end it with a question mark or an exclamation mark, rather than a comma:
‘Stop him!’ she shouted.
‘Did you see that?’ he asked.
Direct speech is often broken up by the information about who is speaking. In these cases, you need a comma to end the first piece of speech (inside the quotation mark) and another comma before the second piece (before the quotation mark):
‘Yes,’ he said, ‘and I always keep my promises.’
‘Thinking back,’ she added, ‘I didn’t expect to win.’
I'm still learning and I hope you are too. I expect I'll still be sprinkling punctuation around, but I now know where to go when someone tells me I have too many comma-croutons. I'll "write on!" and I hope you will too.
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Last month's question: Send some examples of items on Writing.com that show great human character!
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