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Action/Adventure: January 26, 2011 Issue [#4201]

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 This week: When all is Said and Done
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Your protagonist doesn't just have to say empty words. And your antagonist? she doesn't have to just relay messages. Have your characters show and tell about each other. Here in John Grisham's The Rainmaker, Kelly talks about her soon to be ex husband.

"Are you scared?" she asks

"Yes." I reach under the seat for the gun.

"Relax, he's at the ball field. He wouldn't miss it for world."

'She' is Kelly; the baseball player is Cliff, her soon to be ex. The scared one, the narrator is Rudy. Grisham could have found another way to let the reader know a little bit about the character, Cliff. Instead, he chooses to use Kelly as the one to tell readers Cliff is a baseball-playing fanatic.

Let your characters build the suspense. A few pages later, after Cliff walks in on Kelly and Rudy as Kelly is packing to secretly move out.

A fight ensues and Cliff ends up on the floor. Rudy is worked up, 'pretty good'.
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"I'm going to kill him, Kelly," I (Rudy)say, breathing heavily, still scared, still in a rage.

"No."

"Yes. He would've killed us."

"Give me the bat," she says.

"What?"

"Give me the bat, and leave."

As a reader, you're hooked. I have to know what happens next. I don't care that I've been reading for three hours straight, I have less than five hours of sleep before my alarm clock rings, signaling the start of a new day. Time is irrelevant to me. I, the reader, must know what happens next. Why does Kelly want the bat? Why is she asking Rudy to leave the apartment?

Tips
*Bullet*Add small descriptions in some of your tags, like the I say, breathing heavily, still scared.... Doing so heightens the mood and suspense for readers.

*Bullet*Mix it up. If you do your conversations right, readers know who is speaking. You don't always have to say, he said, she pleaded, they begged.


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