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 | The Ice Storm  [E] Image-based entry for Daily Flash Fiction  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Soldier Mike, aka mikewrites! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "The Ice Storm" flash fiction story every time I read it, including today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Congratulations to you on completing eight whole years of the Contest Challenge! "The Contest Challenge" MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "The Ice Storm" flash fiction story of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "April" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your story to be both engaging and heartwarming. Congratulations on already having received eight reviews with an average five star rating for this story. This review will make it nine. I wondered if you'd won the day for the Daily Flash Fiction story with it? I know that contest can be super competitive sometimes, so even great stories sometimes don't win. I hoped you did though. You did a great job of telling a complete story in under three hundred words, which I believe is the requirement for the Daily Flash Fiction contest. My favorite sentence was the last one because it made me smile and was a nice way to wrap up the story. Lovely! Your visual details and dialogue were particularly engaging in this story. Your icy branch image in the thumbnail picture was perfect for this "The Ice Storm" flash fiction story. I didn't notice any spelling in your "The Ice Storm" flash fiction story. I thought the nature and contest entry genres you selected for this story were appropriate matches for it. I liked that you included your word count below your story, and that you made it in brackets, so it was obviously not part of the story. Your story reminded me of the ice storms we used to get in New England. They were so beautiful, yet could be dangerous.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have two little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   I'd recommend adding third genre, as we are allowed three, and people do search by genre here, so it might help you get more readers for this lovely little story. Perhaps "family," "relationship," "garden," "personal," or "experience" might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “nature". I don't have it memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo's Giving Away GPs  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". I suspect that frozen water droplets is technically correct, but it doesn't really signify heaviness to me. I'm talking about its use in this sentence: "It looked as if the entire tree had been dipped in glass, and yesterday’s vibrant, graceful tree was now hunched over under the weight of the frozen water droplets. I wonder if "heavy coating of ice" or "thick ice coating" would work? Or probably you can come up with something more weighty to add instead there. That's the only point in the story that made me pause and think about the words, instead of being absorbed in the tale.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your flash fiction story again tonight and encourage you to keep writing stories. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you and your family!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"  The B.E.A.R. Fund   A Review to Congratulate You on Completing 8 Years of the Contest Challenge!: "The Contest Challenge"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/02/2025 @ 1:36am EDT