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 | The Big Lie  [ASR] Shaking false constructions of self imposed by significant others  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, D.L. Robinson, aka Jooker! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "The Big Lie" poem every time I read it, including today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end, at which point I had tears in my eyes. MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "The Big Lie" poem of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "March" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. Your poem was full of emotions, and at turns both heartbreaking and inspiring. I am so glad that the truth has made you free at last. I thought the rhyming and short lines added to the feeling of action and momentum in your poem. Your rhymes felt natural and not forced, which is always a plus when reading rhyming poetry. The whole poem flowed freely and naturally. My favorite line was the "the lies of old no longer bind" line. It made me glad for you, and for anyone who has successfully shed the lies of their past. I wondered if you had written this poem for a particular prompt, contest, or challenge? Your description was perfect for this poem and reminded me why I'd added it to my file in the first place. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "The Big Lie" poem. I thought the emotional, psychology, and experience genres you selected for this poem were perfectly appropriate matches for it. It made me happy to note that you've already received ten reviews averaging five stars for this poem. I'm glad to add another five star rating, because it's a fantastic piece of writing with real heartfelt emotions expressed clearly and poetically.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   It might help you get more future readers for this powerful poem if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed re-reading your "The Big Lie" poem this evening, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!   Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group"  The B.E.A.R. Fund   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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