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Grief Open in new Window. [E]
Soothing the edges
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM
A poem about soothing hurts and finding hope.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the message - that even though things may be looking down, never underestimate the power of a hug.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There is no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

This was really heart to choose, but I went with this description: "Eventually, the sands castle and the hurt becomes a heart full of pearls." I really took the analogy of the beach, with sand castles (things that can easily fall apart if the waves get to them) and the pearls (hugs) to heart. It's a beautiful analogy and tugs on the heartstrings. The word play is subtle, yet poignant.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading. The title is reflective of the poem. Poignant and hopeful.

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