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 Caught in the Rain Open in new Window. [E]
I was happily soaked by the rain.
by Bikerider Author Icon
Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about being caught in the rain while fishing.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the emotions that the poem evoked. It paints an in the moment in the picture, but the emotions range from being hesitant, to really enjoying the moment.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There's an AABB rythme scheme with a repeating phrase in the last line of the stanza.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes to read at WDC.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "My staying there became my goal, Lifting my soul, lifting my soul." The power of the moment captures our fisherman and he's determined to stay, not necessarily to fish, but to feel the moment.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader, and keeps them reading, wanting to find out what happens next. The title fits the poem well. The poem tells a nice story with simmering emotion underneath the visual. Well done!

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