Hello! I am associated with more than one review group. However, I am reviewing your item today because it was used as a prompt in "Space Blog" .

I did notice a couple of things that may use some improvement.

1 He woke with a start he looked around frantically.
I feel like this could be two separate sentences. (He woke with a start! He looked around frantically.)

2 He tried to remember his name but it was not there.
This sentence could use a comma. (He tried to remember his name, but it was not there.)

3 We are safe for now. but I can not maintain
Can not should be one word. (cannot)

4 "the Trik'ods are also known as
The T in the should be capitalized as it is the beginning of a quote. ("The Trik'ods are also known as)

5 The Draem Eaters.
Dream is misspelled and the end quotes are missing. (The Dream Eaters.")

I hope this is a help to you as I am also just another writer on WDC. Overall, it has the potential to become an even larger fascinating story. It is an interesting read. Thanks for sharing. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .