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 | Lost... On the dark side of the library!  [E] Very few readers stumble across this trove of books, hidden in every library. Beware!  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: Who would have thought that libraries can be so dangerous! I’ve heard books described as portals to other worlds, so I suppose libraries can be, too. The narrator desperately tried to convince himself that this was a good thing, but there was no evidence to confirm that it was, or that it wasn’t. He seemed to try and come up with a theory that made him feel less guilty, and why not – being trapped in a mirror version of the library doesn’t necessarily sound like a bad thing. The ’story within a story’ format worked quite well here. The two men the narrator couldn’t see having a conversation gave the tale a feeling of mystery, like he was listening to something he wasn’t meant to hear. I wasn’t sure about the quiet one, Bill. While I can understand someone not immediately believing the kind of fantastical tale Jim was telling him, he seemed to brush it under the carpet very easily and with what appeared to be discomfort. Perhaps this wasn’t the first time Jim was telling him a tall tale, or maybe he knew something he didn’t want to divulge. And then there was Sarah, the librarian who got sucked into this (quite literally) when she passed at the wrong moment and got curious. Her part in the story made the narrator understand that Jim hadn’t made it up, that there really was something strange going on. A lot of interesting characters that work well together to create an intriguing tale.  Suggestions: I noticed a few small errors: Lot's of people disappear right? There shouldn’t be an apostrophe in “Lots”, and you need a comma after “disappear”. I think its a time wasting crock that's when its the most dangerous There should be an apostrophe in “it’s”, the contraction of “it is”. They suddely moved Just a typo, “suddenly”. we aren't so rushed with chores.Tell you what. You missed the space between the period and “Tell”. tomorrow you wont be laughing There should be an apostrophe in “won’t”. Sarah had no idea what had happened to the lists You missed the period at the end of that sentence. for now Bill and Jim can try to rescue Sara. For now, I have a sneaking suspicion The repetition of “for now” was quite noticeable here and I would suggest omitting the second one; I don’t think you need it. Also, you called her “Sarah” in the rest of the story.  Final Thoughts: I liked the Utopian image the narrator conjured at the end, imagining what it would be like on that other side and how much better it might be than our reality. It would certainly be one explanation why no one ever came back, although his first conclusion, that they were all dead, is also a possibility. You leave it to the readers to decide which one they want to believe. The ending was quite chilling, with the strong hint that both Bill and Jim might have disappeared as well, and I can’t blame the narrator for not wanting to go back to the library! A very original tale; I enjoyed the read.   A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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