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Atop The Falls Open in new Window. [ASR]
A Kiss that will last forever
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that tells of the story of two star crossed lovers that takes place in December.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the story developed over the course of the ballad/poem. Also, the ending was very rewarding after all that investment.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is in the form of a Ballad with a ABCB rythme scheme and with a "walking hand-in-hand" refrain.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the poem easier to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "They found shredded bits of clothes, from both of the desperate lovers." This phrase allows the readers to let their imagination take them into the moment. Not only that it evokes emotion well and the reader can't help but wonder if our lovers truly had a tragic end or if they faked it so they could be together.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening draws the reader in, and keeps them reading. The title is subtle and fits the poem well. Nice storytelling.

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