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 The Promise  Open in new Window. [E]
Paul makes a plan with his wife
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Sumojo!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

Well, this was distressing. A simple but deadly mistake, and a misunderstanding that can never be explained. Wildfires are a serious thing... I wanted to shout at Paul to bring the radio with him, but it was too late.

It takes the prompt into account well, setting up a situation where Paul seemingly didn't stick to the plan when it wasn't his fault at all. I can't say I like it, especially seeing the havoc the LA fires have wreaked in the US. Who knows how many times that situation might have played out in real life.

One suggestion... At the end, it says Sarah stood "silent," but she was crying out about the plan "over and over." Perhaps this could be reconciled.

Take care, thanks for sharing, good luck at the contest, and keep writing *HeartT*


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