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Review #4797109
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings!

I'm here from I Write 2025.

I believe this is the first time I've had the chance to review a fellow entry in the Hook of the Book. It was a good idea to write it into a book entry and use for this activity. And may I ask how you were able to access the image prompt? Do you think it'll still be visible when Jeremy changes it in the forum? He never leaves one up after it's done with. You may want to write a description of the image in case it goes away.

You've captured a tantalizing situation in only 63 words, giving us a fine hook that encapsulates the image while going beyond it.

I had immediately come up with the twist of a human stowaway in the trunk, and so did others as well, but mine occupied a lot more words than yours, mostly because I approached it from the perspective of dialoguing magpies. For a hook and an opening setup, yours is definitely quite succinct, though it doesn't draw in the sharks (but how could it, considering the perspective?)

If I had to make any suggestions, it would be to continue this story at a later date - I'm excited to know more about this character and what becomes of them! Though as you might realize, first person PoV almost always guarantees survival of the narrator - unless the author is Jeff Author Icon *Shock2*

Wouldn't it be fun to make a Drabble (100 word story) out of this image prompt? Remember, the hook is only the opening which grabs the reader's interest. The Drabble has a beginning, middle and end. I have a whole collection of Drabbles which ended up turning into a hodgepodge of odds and ends similar to this - a sort of author's junk drawer. Seems like most of us around here have at least one book of micro writing.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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