Greetings my fellow writer!!


First off love the style, no caps, no punctuation strait to the brain!

At first it made me feel rushed, which is in tune with the theme. I enjoyed the poem very much. Haven't been in school for what seems ages!
A loose suggestion, space it out a bit, there's a couple of lines in the end that can make two, it might make it sharper or just not what you wanted. This might help in keeping that feeling of rush back to routine.

Nothing more to say I bid you, adieu!

SKÖL!!
Hrafnar Árgeir

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