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The stranger in my presence Open in new Window. [E]
Can we learn spiritual lessons from a spider? Or by our on actions toward everyone we meet
by HollisFrances Author Icon
Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE PROSE/REFLECTION

A one minute story about a spider that poses an honest reflection question for the reader.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I like vignettes like this that invoke reflection. It's a one minute story, but will resonate throughout the day.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the narrator. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* THEME

For me, I picked out the theme of life lesson. The most immediate appeared to be kindness, but I think there's deeper's themes as well if you choose to ponder - thinking before reacting comes to mind.

*Star* EMOTIONAL BEATS
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*CheckR* *Checkr* *Checkr* This is a story that we've all encountered, and yet it will resonate in the quiet moments of the day.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Nice voice in this vignette. The writing is candid, honest, relatable and sincere. The title fits the story well. Well done.
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