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More Promptly Poetry PPC 5 Open in new Window. [13+]
More poems for Promptly Poetry, stuffed into this book because I have reached my limit.
by Ned Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Now and Then - Week 20" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Ned!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, Christmas... We thought it was over last week, but they're still cleaning up the clearance tinsel and pine boughs at the big box stores *Laugh*

You have a good poem here, following the rules of the form and setting up a dualistic, reminiscent comparison of Christmas past with Christmas present. We can all identify with the images of happy youth and quieter, more thoughtful older age. As we learn and grow, it is up to us to maintain the Christmas spirit without becoming sour, cynical or giving in to seasonal depression.

I can't tell what size font you've used on mobile, but I suggest Size 4 Verdana for everyone, especially to help poetry stand out in the center of our busy sidebars. A dropnote click me! ▼ to keep your form notes and such tidied away. A word count is also a useful touch to consider, especially if you participate in I Write (oh, I forgot it's different this year... Whatever! I have formed the habit of including a word count with everything so I don't get disqualified from anything *Laugh*)

Aside from these minor suggestions, this is perfect. I dislike telling people to modify their poetry in any way, especially if it's a more personal theme.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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