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 Harmony And Distance  Open in new Window. [18+]
Best friends Ryan and Zach share a bittersweet goodbye as Ryan departs for a music gig.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I noticed this on the Read a Newbie sidebar, and it piqued my curiosity because of the two names and the music theme. It’s the weirdest thing, but my favorite band is OneRepublic, and their lead singer is Ryan Tedder, and his best friend Zach Filkins is the lead guitarist! Not only that, but Ryan Tedder plays the same exact dualistic roles in his career, of running a band as well as helping other artists create smash hits. Were you inspired by the dynamics of OneRepublic? Or am I reading too much into a remarkable coincidence?

All similarities to real life aside, this is a warm and heartfelt vignette showing the deep bond of love and camaraderie between the two men. I sense this could easily be expanded into a fuzzy romance if you wanted to explore that route, but I personally prefer a really good friendship to anything LGBTQ (I’m asexual myself, so I avoid romantic type stories generally… but this is off topic *Laugh*)

Practically speaking, I would recommend you up the rating to 13+ or 18+ for the one f-bomb tossed in. You could remove it, but it does add a touch of realism and help assure us it’s not an AI story. Please don’t take offense at the AI remark… you’d be surprised how much AI content is floating around here, and some of it is distressingly nice to read. This story has a delightfully human touch, with the emotions and feelings and interactions deeply embedded into it. You have a great style, fun and engaging, painting endearing characters in a situation which is instantly relatable for me as a music lover who knows almost everything about the lives of the artists I look up to.

I would also suggest you familiarize yourself with the toolbar features above the text entry box, because you do need to use a larger font, preferably Size 4 Verdana.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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