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The Life and Crimes of Elfenezer Spruce Open in new Window. [13+]
What A Character Entry December 2020
by Roari ∞ Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Roari!

I'm on the hunt for holiday items to participate in "12 Days Of Christmas 2024" Open in new Window., and this is just the sort of thing which looks like fun.

You've made an entertaining criminal comedy out of it, juggling bungling elves and reindeer smarter than they are against a backdrop of thoughtful conflict about toy safety. (I just signed a Consumer Reports petition to increase safety standards for toys with batteries, so this is especially relevant and important.)

The details are hilarious, with the predictable squabbling of morons and the mastermind groaning in frustration. Everything was well thought out, though it seems like you might have been in a hurry when you wrote it... IDK. When I write for the Official WdC Contests I like to bulge the word count as much as possible to get a really good story. You've done well keeping it brief, and I have nothing to suggest for improvement to this jolly, lighthearted skit. It would make a great animation.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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