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Table Talk Open in new Window. [E]
A family is gathered together at the Thanksgiving table and of course, they converse.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Someone tooted during Thanksgiving dinner.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the mystery. There's a whole host of characters who could have been culprit.

*Star* DIALOGUE

The story is told using all dialogue. It's always a challenge when using all dialogue, but I didn't have any problem figuring out who was speaking. Good job capturing each character's voice.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

My the best: "Over the gums, over the tongue, look out stomach here it comes." That was especially visual.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: kitchen setting

This is something that was clarified for the reader.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Marie

Marie is the one who is most offended by the toot and makes the biggest fuss.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. A boisterous kitchen table for sure! Good luck in the Bard's Hall contest.

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