Hi Remi,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will be caught after he takes the flower. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who is tormented by a malevolent phantom clown. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.