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 Hospitality Open in new Window. [E]
A short fiction free-verse poem on a person's relationship with living and not living.
by Mara Elisa Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

First off, I'm glad you have taken care to note this is fictional. Otherwise I would have to point you to appropriate mental health resources.

From an artistic perspective, this is a creative contemplation of one lady's relationship with the Grim Reaper, from his perspective. I don't see much like this around here, and I find this poetic and thought-provoking.

I like to recommend using Size 4 Verdana font around here, to ensure a clear and open reading experience across devices. I'm on mobile right now, so it's readable by default, but it's always best to let you know. You can access all text editing features through the row of tiles at the top of any WdC text entry box. We have tons of fun proprietary tricks around here, like dropnotes and pop notes. Hit the question mark symbol between the M and the smiley for more helpful info.

As someone who struggles with conflicting feelings of loneliness and introversion, I deeply relate to this message. Often I wrestle with the meaning of life and whether I'm serving any purpose at all by being alive... But then I remember everything I've accomplished and my friends and family and the mysterious unknown beyond, and I figure I'm better off alive than dead.

I see you call this a "free verse poem..." perhaps it would be a good idea to add line breaks, rather than a single block of text which reads as a paragraph or monologue. You don't have to overthink this, but as it stands it's more like prose *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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