Hi Theurgy,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why the speaker cannot dream. They will read to the last word to find out. The poem is about someone who is troubled because they don't dream. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.