\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4786179
Review #4786179
Viewing a review of:
 A Roca Vecchia Story Open in new Window. [E]
The Rhythm of the Waves
by helimarie Author Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hi helimarie,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with wonder and peace. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what discoveries the speaker will find at Roca Vecchia. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about an archaeologist who is exploring an ancient site. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization are well developed and believable. The story concentrates on the archaeologist, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:


1)that once sood-Should read "that once stood".

2)kuman history.-Should read "human history".

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Angel Army Signature 6
   *NoteR* You have not yet responded to this review. Ignore
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4786179