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 The Journey of Two Open in new Window. [E]
the truth about love
by sapphire kuyeus Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

This is a powerful poem full of wisdom and sadness as it mourns a lost relationship. You have approached the timeworn subject with originality and keen observation, dreaming about how things could have been and indeed were for a brief time. The moment at the end is ingenious enough for songwriting… indeed, if you’ll excuse my love of music, this reminds me of a Taylor Swift song. Perhaps that is intentional; I see one of your genres is Teen. It was also creative of you to select Melodrama as one genre; I remember puzzling over the definition of the term and wondering what the difference is between that and just plain "drama..."

I like the bold font you've chosen here; it stands out on the page and holds its own against our busy WdC sidebars. The meter is free-flowing and conversational, leading us along through your contemplations without being fussy. I had to go back and check for rhymes; your final one is subtle, and the rest is in free verse.

I can't think of anything to suggest here. This is good enough to submit to several contests... I can think of at least three which accept previously written content. There's "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" Open in new Window., which is currently closed but I would highly recommend you "fan" it by clicking the black heart underneath the item name (not the one alongside the username of the contest owner, although that would be a good idea too...)

Then there's "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. as well as "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window., which are currently open and accepting entries.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* I hope you have lots of fun on WdC *HeartT*


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