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 |  | Lament of the Tooth Fairy  [13+] My little girl is growing up. The myths of childhood are being discovered.  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I can relate to this story very well - I went shopping for a wedding dress with my daughter today. She has grown up to become a beautiful young woman and I got quite teary-eyed when I saw her standing there in those amazing gowns with a big smile on her face. I remember the tooth fairy days though, and part of me wishes she was still that little girl, so this story was perfect for me today. The beginning was funny, first with you having to guess something completely out of the blue with absolutely no chance of hitting the right thing - after all, it wasn’t a front tooth so you couldn’t see the gap, and then your guess. It was a very ‘dad’ guess and I could hear her frustration in her reply. Dads can be quite exasperating!  Your reasoning as to the amount of money to leave made me chuckle, and I remember an even worse predicament when both my children lost a tooth on the same day and I didn’t have the same amounts to leave them under their pillows! But the best part was your daughter confronting you about seeing you put the money under her pillow that morning.  Suggestions: I didn’t notice any errors, and the only suggestion I have was regarding one line that seemed a little abrupt to me: I had no defense, but offered up what I could - feeble as it was. She wasn't buying it. That would have been a good opportunity to add a bit more humour to the tale, and I could imagine you trying to explain that the tooth fairy needs help from the parents because it’s far too much work to get to all the children in one night (the kind of explanation parents give when their children figure out that they buy the Christmas presents). I could also imagine her planting her hands on her hips and telling you that this was silly, or something along those lines, but you didn’t include any of these details in the story. I don’t know if this was written for a contest with a word limit and you had to cut it short, but I would suggest including a little more here, simply because it would be fun to read the full exchange here.  Final Thoughts: My favourite line was the one where you explained why you kept the teeth: I spent the next half-hour explaining to my little girl why her baby teeth were special. They were reminders of things we tend to forget about during the hustle and bustle of everyday life. They were memories. They were life. That was nicely said and made me feel quite glad that I kept my children’s teeth as well, with the date when they were lost, stuck in a little box . I haven’t looked at it for years but they will find it some day and perhaps ask themselves the same question your daughter asked.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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