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Before the Rain Stop Open in new Window. [18+]
Come dance with me in the gentle rain...
by Fictiøn Ðiva the Wørd Weava Author Icon
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about enjoying passion as it rains.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the dichotomy of the stormy rain storm playing out against the backdrop of heated lovers' passion.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem with a ABCC DDEE FGHH rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a visual quality to it when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Let’s splash in puddles pooling at our feet, forget our worries and act indiscreet." This is a very carefree verse to me, one that speaks to enjoying moment, whatever that moment is.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening line draws the reader in with an invitation to dance in the rain. It's a bit suggestive, makes one raise an eyebrow, yet the cadence is irresistible. The title fits the poem well. The poem evokes emotion well.

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