Hi mirasunlight, This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what kind of leader the hare will be. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, forest animals worry when a hare is appointed to lead them. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention: 1)In a few places you have neglected to begin sentences with a capital letter. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader. The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
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