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 Hickory Crab Ch.1 Open in new Window. [ASR]
A bored kid happens upon a strange occurance.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi paroem,

This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with a vivid description of the weather conditions in the setting of the novel. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main character and plot very well for the reader. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The chapter concentrates on the speaker, and the speaker, and they come across as a real person. Great job.

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