Hi Eric

This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of rage and annoyance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the man in the story will catch the fly he is after. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who wakes a fly buzzing around his house and rages war with it. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.