Hi Rafa,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your insight about life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.