Hi NormaJean,

This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing me. This is a wonderful story. The tone is light. You identified it as a children's story, so this tone is just perfect. I was wondering the Mouse will be caught by Mouser as he looks for food. I read to the last word to find out. The story is about a mouse who goes looking for something to eat while trying to avoid the family cat. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. I love stories in which animals are given personalities. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.