Hi Reign,

This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a general statement about group unity. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about social influences and our mental state. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.