Hi Spooky Striped Sox,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, a child is denied nourishment during a hot period and eventually dies. The reader is wondering why no one is helping the child. They will read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.