Hi Theresa,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is intense and full of passion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Lina will convince Taylor to come in and see to her needs. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is trying to coax her lover into a romantic encounter. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. Lina speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.