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 | Honorific Santa  [E] Contest prompt info below, word count 1220  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: Those last two words made me laugh out loud. I could imagine poor Mrs Claus not liking this idea at all, but what was she to do? It was, as Santa kept pointing out, for the children, and she couldn’t let them down. Why he had to be so foolish and break his ankle two days before Christmas was another matter, and I thought she took it very well without too much eye rolling. She handled the whole situation very professionally, which was to be expected because she knew the business as well as he did - better, perhaps, as she seemed to have the organisational talent where he was the face of the business  I have no doubt that she managed to deliver all the presents, even if she doubted herself. I loved the character names you came up with, but the elves weren’t silly little creatures either; they knew their job and could organise everything in an emergency like this. This was really a well-oiled machine and the only one who threw a spanner in the works was Santa!  Suggestions: The story was very well written and I didn’t notice any errors, but I do have one suggestion. Early on in the story, when Mrs Claus arranges for her husband to be taken back to the house, she tries to remember which of the children is getting the sled and who gets the wheelchair, and Santa has to help her out. Later, he says, She knows the list as well as I do. I’m sure she does, but her earlier confusion seems to suggest otherwise. You could weave it into the story that she was a little frazzled by the accident or something along those lines, to iron out the inconsistency.  Final Thoughts: When Santa started talking about the ‘other Santa Claus’, I was as confused as the other characters, but when he explained it all made sense, and I’m glad he could persuade his wife to take on this role because it made for a fun read! It’s not really quite the right time to read Christmas stories, but the title was intriguing and I wanted to have a look even though it’s not even Halloween yet. I’m glad I did because this was a great story.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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