Hello, Tileira, aka reamie!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You wrote an interesting and haunting poem that I enjoyed reading.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I read this nocturne poem yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it (and even commented on it and liked it), but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "October" file. ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

I loved how you built up the emotion and haunting quality of this poem more and more throughout, with a big punch at the end.

I wondered if you placed in the contest (I hope you did!) and did click the contest link but, if there was a list of winners, it wasn't immediately obvious to me.

My favorite sentence was: "I will endure the frost
even to the bone because
of the promise I made to you. "
It was my favorite mostly because that "even to the bone" part gave me chills, but also because of the promise keeping. I liked your choice of endure in the first part too and that it had alliteration with even (in the next line, but part of the same sentence).

The most haunting part was the last line though. I have heard lines like that before, or it might have been my favorite. Even to the bone from the previous bullet though... that felt new and fresh. So both were strong and haunting, and I enjoyed them both and the whole poem too.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your nocturne poem.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's wonderful as it is. Well done!


As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:

I greatly enjoyed reading your nocturne poem!

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler












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