Hi Mateus,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what will happen to Matthew on such an ordinary day. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a business man wakes up and goes about his usual day. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Matthew, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.