Hi Claire,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of anxiety and frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is feeling like they are going nowhere in their life no matter how hard they try. I have felt like this many times in my life. I read to the last word to see if the speaker found a way to improve their situation. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flows. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.