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 Review #4778619 |
 | Haiku 0029  [E] Heartbreak  |
| (4.5)   Greetings, Stargazer ~ DavidtheDreamer! I am reviewing this because I discovered in on Read & Review.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked Haikus are harder to write than what they look like, and I think you've done a great job with this. As your genre choices show, both nature and emotional are touched on. Nice work! Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderThe only thing that is hardly worth mentioning, is the word 'of' beginning in the second line. You might consider omitting it and then adding an extra syllable somewhere else. One example might be: of frozen lonely heartbreak --> frozen deserted heartbreak (or something similar) Final ThoughtsVery nice! Thank you for sharing.  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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