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 Do more they say Open in new Window. [E]
About work and sometimes relationships
by GrandpaJim Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi GrandpaJim Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Do more they say" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning. I found this gem on the site's Read & Review feature, which displays random items to review of those members who are online at that given time.

And congratulations on joining Writing.Com and posting your first items. I hope you'll find WDC helpful to you on your writing journey.

A couple of things popped out at me when your item came up on my screen. First was your handle: Grandpajim. I retired this year and find myself busier than ever. Friends who retired well before I always told me they were busier after retiring--I never believed them until now.

And second, your title hooked me into reading your offering. I felt like it was talking to me in my retirement. There does seem to be that double standard: You have more time available now, you can do more for me.

I wonder at your motivation behind this poetic vocalization. But then, it really doesn't matter to me. I read it how I see it. After all, isn't that what poetry is for? Well, this is what your offering says to me.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

From a technical aspect, I seldom comment on the mechanics of a poem. Poetry is such a personal statement, both for the author and reader. Unless you have an obvious error, or incorrect stated formatting, I take your offering at face value.

Note: Other reviewers will have their own philosophy on reviewing. Sometimes they post it in their Portfolio. Please remember, a review is just one person's opinion at that point in time. It's your choice to take the advice ... or leave it.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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