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by Angelica Weatherby-Star on top Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "National Punctuation Day" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Angelica Weatherby-Star on top Author Icon,

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The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group with which they are affiliated. These are only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer, and they are given solely for the purpose of being helpful.


What I liked:

*Bulletv* I read this Express It In Eight prompt yesterday, but I couldn't get my head around writing something clever for it. You have done exactly that, though. You have used a lot of different punctuation marks (I would add quotation marks to your list, though).

*Bulletv* The last two lines made me laugh out loud! I love your comment about the grammar nazis not agreeing with punctuation not being necessary in poetry. I have been subjected to those very people countless times. I think I've finally accepted that in free verse, it is either all or nothing. I still try to be creative with my use of punctuation, though.

*Bulletv* I love the randomness of the first verse. That made me chuckle, too. When the sailor suddenly appears and says, "Oh! I got a big one!" it took a moment for me to realise you said a sailor because you just mentioned a fish. I wondered why it was a sailor at first, but I get it now.


Suggestions:

I would add a in front of fish and plant because it doesn't read naturally as it is. I had to re-read that line a few times to make it flow. I think it also confused me because of the period on the previous line. It felt like it should be a comma. It breaks up the flow a little to have periods in such a short poem. (Although I know you wanted to use them or the prompt. But you have one at the end of the poem.) Anyway, these are minor points. On the whole, I love this poem.


Parting comments:

I really enjoyed reading this. It made me laugh, and it's very clever. You have packed a lot of different punctuation marks into a short poem. Nicely done.


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