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 Funny World Open in new Window. [13+]
A man is saved by a dog chasing a cat.
by Winchester Jones Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings,

I noticed this on my sidebar and thought it looked like a good read. You have proven me right *Smile*

Such a good story, quite realistic and indeed it feels like a true story, but I don’t suppose it is. On the other hand, things like this are quite possible. I love the hopeful ending and the wry humor of how the guy wants the cat to be safe even though he’s in such a precarious position himself. The moments of peace after everyone settled down on the side of the bridge were quite something.

I would suggest adding two more relevant genres for at least a couple good reasons. One, it will help people find your story when browsing through the site, and two, it gives us as many opportunities as possible to nominate your item for Quill Awards. I would recommend “Philosophy,” “Drama,” or “Emotional.” Another thing, I think the sentence about the statistic of people diving off the dark side got a little mixed up; you may want to rephrase it for clarity. The man finds it sad that the one person chose the dark side, not that everyone else did, right?

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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