Hi Mary,


This is a wonderful piece. The tone is formal. It suits the piece and plot very well. The reader is wondering what other things this man will do in his pursuit of the service of God. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about a man who becomes a preacher without really knowing what will be expected of him. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the man becoming a preacher, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need our attention:

1)You should break the piece up into sentences to make it easier to follow.

2)"i" should be capitalized when the character is referring to himself.

The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.