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Early Frost Open in new Window. [E]
Acrostic poem about wishing for a warm spell before winter strikes.
by Jo Paynter Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jo Paynter Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Early Frost" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning. I found your poem on the site's Read & Review feature. This feature offers up some great opportunities for reviewers to earn quite a sum of gift points based on the length of the item displayed. It lists random items from members currently online.

I love Acrostic poems. They breathe a certain clever creativity from their authors. Your imagination speaks to that creativity. I love your Cover picture (I LOVE snow), though I think snow in that amount negates hope for that warm spell.

Some forms of poetry are obvious to the reader as to their composition and formatting. In this case, you've chosen to highlight the first letter of each line by making it bold. Each letter spells out the poem's Title, and sets it apart from the rest of each sentence.

But, may I suggest that you provide an Author's Note at the bottom of the poem detailing the format expectations for this poetic form? Not every person who may read your offering will automatically know the proper formatting. It's not required when posting on site; it's more of a social convention of seasoned poets here.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* A technical suggestion:  Consider moving Truth to the previous line. "Time" still works for the bolded "T", and this makes that final line more compelling.  

         *Bullet* Also, I would increase the line spacing slightly for easier readability. That's often a trial and error effort for me.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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