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Evidence of autumn Open in new Window. [E]
Haiku: A quick observation about the pending arrival of autumn.
by Jo Paynter Author Icon
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Jo Paynter Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Evidence of autumn" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

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I found your item on the site's Read & Review feature. This feature lists random items for review from members who are currently online.

I do enjoy reading and writing Haiku. I tend to learn things from dissecting them. I didn't know anything about Hostas--I looked them up for more information. That's one of the perks about doing reviews for others.

A Haiku follows a 5-syllable, 7-syllable, 5-syllable format for each of three lines, with a bent toward nature. That latter part I had heard from some place but can't find any real support for it. So, I'm just noting it here.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

Your mechanics are well done.

Punctuation is always suspect to me. Yet you end the last line with a period, but not any other line. Why not be consistent.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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